Rewriting the opening

I have been rewriting the first two chapters of Crossing the Wilderness. The feedback I received was that the writing was good but too sense, making it too hard to get into the story.

This time I cut out quite a bit, making it a shorter, more streamlined journey to get to the meat of the story - when the characters enter The Wilderness. I also made a few changes so that the main character Pierce is not using unrealistic intuition in order to escape from his dire predicament.

Descriptive Rejection

Here is a helpful rejection that I received today:

Dear Dave, 

Thank you for being so patient while I've reviewed CROSSING THE WILDERNESS for possible representation.  While I was intrigued by this concept, unfortunately I had a hard time getting drawn into the story.  Though the writing has merit and even points of brilliance, it is also extremely dense, unnecessarily so. Although there are many fast-paced events, it takes quite some time to get through them, especially as the scenes drag a bit with too much detail and words. I also feel there are too many convenient solutions. Although Pierce is in a life-threatening situation and running from the cops in the government bunker, he conveniently possesses a perfect intuition for knowing when to act and finding the solutions, repeatedly. 

For these reasons, I must pass.

Please don't take this rejection as a comment on your writing ability, as it is not intended to be one. I'm sure another agent will feel quite differently.

I wish you the best of luck in your endeavors, 

I received another rejection a few days ago, with the agent also saying she had trouble getting into the story.  It seems I have a problem with my opening chapters, but I may have already burned my bridges with the agents I met at the conference.  This has me stressed...