I have been rewriting the first two chapters of Crossing the Wilderness. The feedback I received was that the writing was good but too sense, making it too hard to get into the story.
This time I cut out quite a bit, making it a shorter, more streamlined journey to get to the meat of the story - when the characters enter The Wilderness. I also made a few changes so that the main character Pierce is not using unrealistic intuition in order to escape from his dire predicament.
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