Dear Dave,
Thank you for being so patient while I've reviewed CROSSING
THE WILDERNESS for possible representation. While I was intrigued by this
concept, unfortunately I had a hard time getting drawn into the story.
Though the writing has merit and even points of brilliance, it is also
extremely dense, unnecessarily so. Although there are many fast-paced
events, it takes quite some time to get through them, especially as the scenes
drag a bit with too much detail and words. I also feel there are too many
convenient solutions. Although Pierce is in a life-threatening situation and
running from the cops in the government bunker, he conveniently possesses a
perfect intuition for knowing when to act and finding the solutions,
repeatedly.
For these
reasons, I must pass.
Please don't
take this rejection as a comment on your writing ability, as it is not intended
to be one. I'm sure another agent will feel quite differently.
I wish you
the best of luck in your endeavors,
I received another rejection a few days ago, with the agent also saying she had trouble getting into the story. It seems I have a problem with my opening chapters, but I may have already burned my bridges with the agents I met at the conference. This has me stressed...
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